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Today I made American affairs homework, but my English skill is very low. Please check my homework. My story title is  

  

~During Treaty of Paris ends French and Indian War Story~

Please read it.

What do you think about peace?? I think peace is not here. Pease stay in heaven. But I want to go to heaven soon. Almost people think so. This story is sad story…

This story Treaty of Paris ends French and Indian War. My name is David. I live in America. And I am native people. I was 21 years old. I have girlfriend. My girlfriend name is Chloe. She is same age. I love her. But this story, I want to forget this memory.

In 1755, started French and Indian War. For the first time, I and my girlfriend spend peace time. I went to river every day, because I fishing fish. My girlfriend went to farm every day. She makes vegetables. I loved her dishes. And my friend Kevin also goes to hunting. Kevin also has girlfriend.

Ends of war, British officer came my village, and said “You guys should belong to this war! If you disobey this order, we would break this village!” Back then this time, our village cheers British. Battle of Britain was bad, so British decided to use the war to the natives. We so surprised. But this is a fate. We said “We don’t want to belong to war. But it is fate. We have condition. If our village attacks by enemy, we come back our village.” British officer said “OK. I understand.” But this promise, here was promise that will be not protected.

First my friend Kevin goes to battlefield. Two month ago, I go to battlefield. But British battlefield is was hell. No food no medicine. Maybe this battle is finish soon. Just in time, we got a letter from my girlfriend. This letter said, “please come back soon!! Our village attacked by France!!” We soon negotiate with General. But general said, “You must stay here. Because you are British people. There are signed a treaty with us.”   

After ten days, French and Indian War. British are loosed. I and Kevin come back my village. But too late. My village everything was gone. Food, house, people and so on. And also our girlfriends… We cried all night.

If we come back at that time, maybe change result in my village. We should come back soon. We are surge of anger. We took unreasonable treatment in British. We cannot suppress our anger. And we are last of natives, because our native’s woman all died. So we cannot make new baby…We only go decayed. I and Kevin deiced to select go to die and meet my girlfriend in heaven. In this day, we drop in valley and died. We meet my girlfriend again in heaven….  We can become a star. And I was able to obtain an eternal peace.  

 This is my self-story. Please check it. If you find mistake, please comment in this blog.

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